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David Kunin's avatar

You had me from “The mother was impatient, even though she was dead.” Really lovely being led by you to so many unexpected places!

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Julie Gabrielli's avatar

Oh, my, Sal. This is mesmerizing. The rhythm held me in sway. I love the simultaneity of time here -- how the past is present and vice versa.

Some of my favorite lines in the first one: "I held in a punishable sigh." "Her girl gang broke into people’s houses for the pleasure of breaking and the pleasure of into."

And jolts of recognition! ". . . in the case of the mother, nothing needed to make her that way."

I was thinking as I read the second one, this is like a dream, and then it became self-aware! ha!

"Every hair on the fox is beautiful."

Gorgeous, Sal. Every hair.

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